Ser.net's MPF Application.

**OOC portion**
   Steam username: Ser.net
   SteamID: STEAM_0:0:41169711
   Ban history: None.
   Past RP experience: Multiple servers, such as LP (bad example), many small servers, and VG (Where I spent most of my RP experience)
   Past CP experience: FG [Dead] (C17.MPF.JURY:DvL-435) VG (C17.MPF.COURT:02-609) VBG (CPF.609.PATROL:03)
   RP example:
/me walks to the man slowly while looking around
Cit1: Hey.
Cit2: Listen, I don't feel safe around here.
Cit1 walks closer to Cit2 while looking at her with curiocity. "What's wrong?"
MPF1 aims at the Cit2 while pulling out his radio and saying something in it. His finger is right near the trigger, ready to fire at Cit2 at any time.
MPF1: (yells) FACE THE WALL!
Cit2 attemps to run
MPF2 walks in the room while Cit2 tries to run and trips her over
MPF2: (radio) 10-16, arresting a malcomplient citizen.

   RP example of arresting a citizen and then the following punishment: Cit1 pulls out a 9mm pistol and fires at the Cit2. Cit2 looks dead.
MPF1 runs to the crime scene and pulls out his MP7 and aims at the anti-citizen's hand.
MPF1: (yells) Drop the weapon on the ground and face the wall!
Cit1 doesn't compy with orders and attemps to fire at MPF1. MPF1's Kevlar protects him. Cit1 attepts to fire, again, but he is out of ammo.
CIt1 faces the wall and drops the weapon.
MPF1 ties the citizen (resist?) while ordering him to apply.
Cit1: Cit1, 12345.
MPF1 checks the data and adds penalty points on his data. "Homicide, Malcomplience, attempted attack on officer. Verdict: Amputation."
MPF1 knocks out the Cit1 and carrys him to the Nexus. He throws his body in the cell while waiting near it.
MPF2: Verdict?
MPF1: Amputation.
MPF2 walks in the cell and pulls out her stunstick.
MPF2: Face the wall.
Cit1 complies with orders, and MPF2 knocks him out.
MPF2 carries Cit1 to the pod which leads to the inceneration room

   Character backstory: Cheyenne Gray was born in 1990 in Washington. She lived in Middle-Class family. Her father, James, was a millitary pilot at the nearest millitary base.
Her mother was a nurse at the hospital.

Cheyenne was a very intelligent student, and as a result of her intelligence, she was promoted to special educational program. After 12 years since her first day of school, she graduated. She was enrolled in the nearest college.

When she enrolled in the college, her mother died because of the heart attack.

When 8-hour war started, her professor tried to resist the Combines. He was killed instantly. Cheyenne didn't try to resist. Her father died when he was fighting combines.

In City 13, Cheyenne tried her best to be loyal to MPF, because she knew that it would benefit her. She was extremely brainwashed by propaganda, even though she wasn't an impressionable person. She tried to keep it from other citizens, because if someone knew that she's loyal to MPF, she would be in danger.

She met a lot of friends there. Some of them were loyal to MPF, just like her, and some of them that wanted to resist MPF, and eventually, got amputated.

One of the Coalition members heard that she was a loyalist, and he wanted to kill her, because she would've reported them. He failed to murder her, and then he got caught and interegated. Cheyenne got sent out of the City 13 so that she would be safe from coalition.
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   **IC portion**
   Name: Cheyenne Gray
   Age: 31
   Birth year: 1990
   Past crimes: None
   Loyalty Points: 0
   Citizen Status: Citizen
   Medical/Engineering experience: Yes [ ] No [+]
               If yes, which (or both) and explain:
   Why do you want to join the Union?: I want to join the Union because I want to help the Union with the current anti-civil activity in City 23 and help the Civil Citizens with their duties.
   Any other information you wish to share?: Reported multiple crimes, such as homicides, anti-civil propaganda, and trepassing.
   Your assigned apartment will be checked regularly. This is for your safety. Do you understand?    Yes [+]  No [  ]
   You may or may not be awarded with extra benefits according to your dedication whilst on-duty. Do you understand?   Yes [+]  No [  ]
   You may not reveal your identity to anyone but fellow units and family members, but only if you know you can trust them entirely. This is for your safety. Do you understand?  Yes [+]  No [  ]

The RP example and the arrest example are acceptable. I'm rather glad the arrest example follows the rule of 'do it away from the public eye'. However, my complain comes in the form of the backstory. It feels... oddly choppy with how it's written. That being said, your application does not hinge on backstory or even forum application alone. For now I will settle on pending until I see more of your RP on the server.

NuggetandSkull wrote:The RP example and the arrest example are acceptable. I'm rather glad the arrest example follows the rule of 'do it away from the public eye'. However, my complain comes in the form of the backstory. It feels... oddly choppy with how it's written. That being said, your application does not hinge on backstory or even forum application alone. For now I will settle on pending until I see more of your RP on the server.

The backstory is little outdated-I forgot to add other stuff to it.

I can see the story there, but it doesn't work together very well. It has an odd tendency to just state what happened in chronological order without fleshing it out as well as being almost conflicting (not being impressionable yet heavily brainwashed from propaganda). Aside from that, your application is shaping up well so it's relying on your on server RP right now.

I like how the RP examples carry over, nice touch! You back story, in my opinion, is acceptable. Now it just depends on me and Nug seeing you RP a bit more.